Christmas

WALT write a recount using a rubric.

Tell the reader about a special time with your family….

It could be:

• Christmas Day
• A family celebration (christening, marriage)
• Church
• A family Birthday celebration

You will have:

5 minutes to plan on scrap paper

30 minutes to write.

5 minutes to edit.

Use the rubric below to help you edit

A special time with my family! On Saturday last week my family had and I had a Christmas. At the Christmas there was so many different amazing people at the party. The people that was there came from different kind of amazing place like America, Australia, Niue, Tonga, and finally New Zealand. During the day I thinked to myself why are these incredible talent people are here then this shocked feeling hit me with an idea “they may be parts of my family”. So I walked over to them and credited them inside.At the end of the day I got to see my hole family there it was on of a life time. The felt so happy that I saw people that I haven’t seen before.

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Ideas	Ideas don’t have details to describe, and need more information.	3 main ideas Using describing words to tell what happened.	3 or more main ideas. Using describing words to tell what happened. Describing why or how each idea is important.
Vocab/ Words	No descriptive words Not many specific words to add detail.	Uses some technical/specific words but could use more Use a few describing words (adjectives) but could use more	Using specific words to add detail. eg. Rotunda instead of meeting place Use descriptive words (adjectives) to create help  a picture in our mind with our words.
Text Structure 5W’s = Where What Why When Who	Uses some of the 5W’s & How Uses some time linking words. May have a short conclusion with feelings.	Introduction has 5W’s and How Paragraph’s start with connectives time linking words. Conclusion only has the feeling.	Use a ‘Hook in’ to grab the reader’s attention. Introduction has 5W’s & How to quickly describe the recount. Paragraphs start with connectives (time linking words) Conclusion repeats the main ideas, and how we felt or liked most..
Sentence Structure	Capitals and full stops not always used. Some sentences make sense, some past and present tense not used right. Sentences carry on too long and should have more full stops. Sentences start the same way.	Sentences start with capitals and end with full stops. Most sentences make sense. Has some compound sentences Sentences carry on too long and should have more full stops. Some sentence starters are repeated.	Sentences start with capital letters and end with full stops. Sentences make sense and use past and present tense correctly. Use FANBOYS to make compound sentences. Sentences start differently (not the same starting) to add interest.